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Hi Ruby,Well done on getting your first couple of reviews out ! :)I am going to comment on this post, but my comments go for both your reviews, as there are similar areas to look at...OK, firstly, a big 'well done' on getting the referencing spot on :)My comments centre mainly on your 'academic voice' and the way you are using quotes. So, firstly, I recommend you have a look at this guide on producing more objective writing -http://myuca.ucreative.ac.uk/bbcswebdav/pid-243638-dt-content-rid-304615_1/courses/RCGA4002_13/Academic%20writing%20-%20Hints%20%26%20Tips.pdfOne way to do this, is to not use the 1st person, but instead use the 3rd person...this is quite tricky to do initially, and feels a bit strange, but it will really give your writing a more scholarly feel. Also, try and avoid bringing your personal feelings into the review ('I loved' etc).Next, your use of quotes; again the guide mentioned above has some great advice on how to introduce and analyse a quote. As an example, if you were to look at the quote that you have used, by J. Renouf which talks about the set distortion, you could let this lead you into a discussion which looks at German Expressionism - in other words, you are putting the set design into context socially and culturally.Finally, it's good to see you picking out how this film has influenced more modern-day film makers.I am looking forward to next weeks review! :)
Hello Jackie,Thank you for the feedback its really helpful as writing isn't my strong point. I'll take your advice and use it in the next review. :).
Hey Ruby - a Scribd film review - very flash! :)