Tuesday, 1 October 2013

Space Oddities' Film Review

Metropolis

Directed by Fritz Lang

4 comments:

  1. Much better, Ruby! :) See how much more academic this sounds, now that you have taken the 3rd person route.
    Just one more quick comment about the way you are referencing within the text; you only need the author's surname and the date, so for example, (Bradshaw, 2010).
    Also, remember to italicise the quotes, as well as the film titles.

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    1. Oh okay, I'll make sure to do that in future thank you :).

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  2. yep, much more authoritative now, Ruby - though there's a few stylistic things I'd point out for - for example 'slowly goes to pot' is a bit too conversational (the sort of thing you'd say about this film if you were talking to your classmates, as opposed to writing for a formal audience), so watch out for phrases that 'sound' like you're talking. Also, whenever you refer to another film in your review - for example, here you mention Caligari and 'Lune', you should give the director and the date: I know you know this, but your reader doesn't, so always write your reviews so that they are independent reading experiences - in other words, they contain all relevant information a new reader might need to know.

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    1. Yeah I tend to write how I talk, easiest way to get out what I wanna say; I'll check and check again next time. Oh right, yeah okay, thank you.

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