1) At the beginning the graphics need improving as you know. 2) Take out the explanation of taxonomy.3) Take out the number 10 (no need say an amount). "I have identified the following gelotological groups"4) It ends a bit abruptly - Is there anything you can do to bridge the gap between the maniac and policeman in terms of audio? Or you could try adding in your group shot? Experiment a bit.
Hi Alan - we've had a chat about this today and Ruby is going to upload an additional version with a few bits and bobs excised/added.